Comments on: Bad 9-11 poetry: ‘Liberty Will Prevail,’ ‘Let Us Unite’ http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/ Eric D. Snider's blog. Fri, 10 Feb 2012 22:54:04 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Occasional Commentator http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-136921 Occasional Commentator Fri, 16 May 2008 15:58:25 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-136921 I made it through the first line of the first poem thinking, "Hyperbole, but palatable, given the immediate shock and grief after the attacks", but then the word "besot" put an end to that. The nation was DRUNK with pain and grief?! (Besot can also mean in a stupor, but I'm sure more people with at least a 10th grade English background would associate it with being hammered in a Shakespearean way.) So much for the first draft - even Roosevelt's "Day of Infamy" speech was revised several times before being announced. I made it through the first line of the first poem thinking, “Hyperbole, but palatable, given the immediate shock and grief after the attacks”, but then the word “besot” put an end to that. The nation was DRUNK with pain and grief?! (Besot can also mean in a stupor, but I’m sure more people with at least a 10th grade English background would associate it with being hammered in a Shakespearean way.) So much for the first draft – even Roosevelt’s “Day of Infamy” speech was revised several times before being announced.

]]> By: Chrystle http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-24884 Chrystle Sat, 24 Mar 2007 21:57:27 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-24884 The rhythm in the first one actually isn't that bad - rough in a few places, but still. It's the sentiments that get me. It is possible to write a poem that expresses emotion without being sappy. The rhythm in the first one actually isn’t that bad – rough in a few places, but still. It’s the sentiments that get me. It is possible to write a poem that expresses emotion without being sappy.

]]> By: Weezy http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-22254 Weezy Thu, 08 Mar 2007 19:36:39 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-22254 Poem after alleged poem, nothing will ever come close to the poignant utterance "oh, day to flabbergast" from the Ballad of 9/11/01. Love the Snide Remarks - I find myself laughing out loud at inappropriate times and places lately and it's usually because of you. Thanks! Poem after alleged poem, nothing will ever come close to the poignant utterance “oh, day to flabbergast” from the Ballad of 9/11/01.

Love the Snide Remarks – I find myself laughing out loud at inappropriate times and places lately and it’s usually because of you. Thanks!

]]> By: Roisin http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21315 Roisin Fri, 02 Mar 2007 19:31:40 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21315 "We’ve defended many nations that we might have liberty;" Translation: we've started loads of wars so that we can be great. “We’ve defended many nations
that we might have liberty;”

Translation: we’ve started loads of wars so that we can be great.

]]> By: Ben C. http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21287 Ben C. Fri, 02 Mar 2007 16:11:02 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21287 I hate it when people write "alot" instead of "a lot". It's not a word people!! Trust me! If it was the dictionary would say "Alot: a word only stupid people use". I hate it when people write “alot” instead of “a lot”. It’s not a word people!! Trust me! If it was the dictionary would say “Alot: a word only stupid people use”.

]]> By: David Manning http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21136 David Manning Thu, 01 Mar 2007 22:59:05 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21136 If you're talking about the poems posted here, that's virtually always because they're so... well, bad. If you’re talking about the poems posted here, that’s virtually always because they’re so… well, bad.

]]> By: card http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21131 card Thu, 01 Mar 2007 21:59:37 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21131 I think I need a class in poetry. I can never seem to get the rhythms and rhyming schemes of a lot of these poems. I think I need a class in poetry. I can never seem to get the rhythms and rhyming schemes of a lot of these poems.

]]> By: David http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21130 David Thu, 01 Mar 2007 21:44:55 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21130 I particularly enjoy the bad grammar and seemingly random capitalisation in the second one. It also has one of the most 'original' rhyming patterns I've ever seen. Somehow picking on the fact that she's written a 'poam' seems too harsh though... I particularly enjoy the bad grammar and seemingly random capitalisation in the second one. It also has one of the most ‘original’ rhyming patterns I’ve ever seen.

Somehow picking on the fact that she’s written a ‘poam’ seems too harsh though…

]]> By: RandyTayler http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/comment-page-1/#comment-21122 RandyTayler Thu, 01 Mar 2007 21:00:46 +0000 http://www.ericdsnider.com/blog/2007/03/01/bad-9-11-poetry-liberty-will-prevail-let-us-unite/#comment-21122 I was gonna say reading this is like watching a train wreck, but I think it may be more like watching a plane crash. Too soon? I was gonna say reading this is like watching a train wreck, but I think it may be more like watching a plane crash.

Too soon?

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